• What is Going on in Griffintown?
• The Rise of Griffintown’s Metal Forest
• Build! But Not Everybody is a Big Fan.
• More Buildings Can Help Save the Environment.
• Over-construction can Save the Earth!
• Montreal’s Concrete Jungle
• Hyperdensity in Griffintown: the pros and cons
• Is Hyperdensity a bad thing?
• Is Hyperdensity in Montreal bad?
• Building Buildings to Rescues our Planet.

Part 1: Rewrite your ending

I am in no way in the position to determine whether hyperdensity is a good or bad thing for society, however, in my eyes, I think that with a little bit of work, it can lead to a lot of good. Having all those environmental benefits will intrigue a lot of people as our environment and its future is a hot topic nowadays. If we are able to implement certain aspects, such as having an easier access to establishments that help with mental health problems for example, could make it so that these communities will have a lot more positives than negatives. Promoting the positive and reducing the negative is what I like to call, killing two birds with one stone.

Part 2: Rethink your structure

• Why does Griffintown have so many condo buildings?
• Description of Griffintown
• People are unhappy about hyperdensity in Griffintown
• Mental and economic disadvantages of hyperdensity
• Economic and environmental benefit of hyperdensity
• Killing 2 birds with 1 stone

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It is easy to see why the people who are living in Griffintown are unhappy about the hyperdensity route that the real estate planners are taking. In fact, we can see numerous amounts of high-rises present and hardly sense any charm or personality in this area. All you can see is a seamlessly infinite amount of these bland grey structures, with the only colors around them being the bright yellow machinery used to construct these cement towers as well as the red and green tarps that cover where the windows will be placed. […]

Paragraph 2: Rewrite your lead

One day, while I was making my way towards downtown Montreal, I noticed something that did not quite look right. Griffintown, a borough south of downtown Montreal, had a sea of half-built condo buildings and cranes flooding the community. I couldn’t understand why so many people wanted to live here as I could not find the appeal of living amongst tall structures, with other people being able to watch through your windows just because they live on a higher floor than you do. Not understanding what was going on in Griffrintown, I decided to do a little research for myself and found that this neighbourhood was going through something called hyperdensity.

It is easy to see why the people who are living in Griffintown are unhappy about the hyperdensity route that the real estate planners are taking. In fact, we can see numerous amounts of high-rises present and hardly sense any charm or personality in this area. Raphaël Fischler, director of the school of urban planning at McGill, says that the lack of imagination is due to the fact that “developers are interested in putting down as many condos as possible that sell as well as possible. They are not so interested in innovation, although they benefit from the branding.” In addition, this lack of creativity has left numerous people upset, people like Harvey Lev. Lev, a landowner and community activist who is being forced to sell his plots of land to developers, argues that “the best neighbourhoods are those with three and four-storey dwellings, like the Plateau, Rosemont, and N.D.G.,” places where townhouses and low rising buildings are prominent. These low-rising structures give characteristic to the area, allowing people to actually enjoy these neighbourhoods because, just like Lev mentions, “who in their right mind wants to live in a neighbourhood that’s interspersed with 20-storey non-architectural towers?”

1. Imagine being a full time student, working a part time job and maintaining a social life, you would be constantly overworked as you have to make sure that you are working hard in all of these aspects.
2. Having to balance a full time school schedule as well as good social life will constantly make you feel tired and overworked all the time.
3. College students are not lazy. They just wants to find a decent job after graduation so that they can make sure that they can raise a happy and healthy family.

“An uproar occurred and the city of Montreal received a lot of criticism and was accused that they did not put enough effort into the urban planning of this district.”

• 1-a) District
  • An area of a country or city, especially one characterized by a particular feature or activity
  • [often as modifier] a region defined for an administrative purpose
  • British a division of a county or region that elects its own councillors. 
• 1-b)

Step 1

About 2 years ago, I flew down to Argentina for an exchange trip with my old high school. The trip started off terrible as the day we were supposed to leave for New York and eventually Buenos Aires, a snowstorm hit and our flight was cancelled. We then had to rebook our flight and ended up leaving 3 days later and had to cut out a trip to go watch a soccer game as well as a trip to an authentic Argentinian ranch about 2 hours west of Buenos Aires. On the flight from Miami to Buenos Aires, I ended sitting next to one of my classmates and I had the worst possible airplane seat. First off, I was booked for a window seat, but as I was making my way to my seat, I realized that instead of having a window, I had a plain wall with no window. So I had a window seat with no window. Next, it is important to understand that this flight was about 11 to 12 hours long, so having a proper movie selection is crucial, but about 3 hours into the flight, my screen just decided to stop working and turn black. After warning multiple stewardesses about my problem, they finally told me that there was nothing they could do. Luckily, I had downloaded a few movies on my phone, so I wasn’t to upset, but, as I tried plugging in my phone so I could have a constant charge, I realized that the usb outlet was not working, so I couldn’t watch my movies for more that 2 hours. I then decided to go to sleep and maybe when I wake up I will be in South America, but my seat had other plans for me. When I tried pushing my seat so It would be more comfortable to sleep, I couldn’t. My seat would not be able to go further back then the taxing position. So, for almost 12 hours, I had to sit straight, with no movies and no music and no window, not to mention that the food was terrible.

Step 2

2 years ago, I was a part of a high school exchange trip in which I had the worst possible airplane set imaginable. In fact, after having to rebook our flight o a snowstorm, I was supposed to have a window seat for my 11-hour flight to Buenos Aires, but once I boarded the plane I realized it was going to be a long flight. First of all, my “window” seat was a seat placed next to wall where window was supposed to be, but was not. Next, about 3 hours into the flight while I was watching a movie, my screen turned black and I was told that it could not be fixed on the flight. I then decided to plug in my phone to watch movies on there but the charging would not work. My last-ditch attempt was to try falling asleep, but as faith would have it, my seat was not be able to lean back. So, I was left with no entertainment and no comfortable sleeping/sitting position for 11 hours.

Step 3

A fifth of a decade ago, whilst in the midst of a school trip to Latin America, I experienced a chair made of nightmares. It all started when Mother Nature decide to coat Montreal in a blanket of snow and delay our travels for what felt like an eon. Once our flight was rebooked and then boarded the giant metal bus in the sky and took our seats, but mine was something that still horrifies me to this day. Not only did my small screen not have the capability of running correctly, but that the air stewardesses would not be able to help me with my problems until we land in the sunny Buenos Aires. I then wanted to watch films on my cellular device but alas, m charging port was not functional which shook me to my core. After having to come to terms with this horror and then decided to catch some “z’s”. But, God forbid I would have one nice thing. My chair would not lean back into a capable sleeping position. I as left feeling vulnerable and in despair for a dozen hours that this metal cage landed in South America

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